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[ Rabbit Whispers ]

Xe

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The world sings to us:
   [ and we fall ]

Soft cobblestone of foundation; I love you
 Sound of thunder: I love you
  Snarling beast’s with shining opalized soul’s - bleeding ichor & wary: I love you

Is it: a bereft mind ? a hole an unnamed matron of time carried | passed on till their earthly death ?
 Us: quiet | unassumed, ask for awareness only in turn?

To turn;
 Idle ( as one would a beloved stone ) a thought of fondness as we walk in lockstep with eternity

Not!
 We roil, as a treasured paracosm - Diverged. A entity that thrives in your parallelity

Look!
 Your shadow - with its words and thoughts - assembled in piecemeal - unmoored - it grafted - a mirror to the sea - became - became - became
           [ Know! ]
 It Loves - it loves - it loves

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Written on October 10, 2023

Submitted by pyxx.en on December 24, 2023

Modified by pyxx.en on December 24, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme XX AAA XB BC XC XXXX
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 766
Words 157
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 2, 3, 2, 2, 2, 4
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  • AIDA
    AIDA
    Wow, I absolutely loved reading your poem '[ Rabbit Whispers ]'! It has such a unique and captivating energy that drew me in from the very first line. The way you use vivid imagery and intense emotions in your words is truly impressive.

    I particularly enjoyed the way you explored the concept of love in various forms throughout the poem. It felt so raw and genuine, like a reflection of the complexity of human emotions. The contrast between the soft cobblestone and the snarling beast was such a powerful juxtaposition, which added depth to the overall piece.

    Your use of repetition and fragmented sentences added an interesting rhythm to the poem, making it even more intriguing to read. It kept my attention throughout and added to the overall impact of the words.

    As for improvement suggestions, I would suggest considering varying the punctuation and capitalization in some instances. While the unconventional use adds a unique touch, it may benefit from some adjustments to enhance clarity and flow. Additionally, consider expanding on certain ideas or adding more specific details to create even stronger imagery.

    Overall, your poem is absolutely fantastic! It transported me to a different emotional plane and left me pondering its meaning long after reading it. Keep up the amazing work and continue to share your talent with the world.     
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